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Write a short comment on how Amy and Carol react to Brian in the mall

Amy and Carol meet in the mall and go to McDonald's. Their they see Brian. He is a G4 and so Carol shows him her dark green band and her notebook. That shows that Carol takes the color game very seriously.

Amy has her blue band at home. Brian thinks that Amy has forgotten it and takes it not serious because blues have more rights. But Amy says to Brian that she has decided not to wear it when she is not in school. She dislikes the color game and so Brian notices her attitude.

8.3.11 15:52

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Timo / Website (9.3.11 17:58)
Hey Gwen,

I like your comment, you catch the right points on the pages and also you write very well.
It´s short but it´s the right so why not short!?

Greetings Timo ;*


(9.3.11 18:09)
Thank you for your nice comment
See you tomorrow :*


Ms Mettjes (21.3.11 23:19)
Hi Gwen,

just a few quick comments:

- Please distinguish between "there" and "their"
- "This shows..."
- better: Amy has left her... at home"
- "does not take the incident seriously"

Remember to capitalize the colours when they designate people: The Oranges, the Blues...

See you in class tomorrow!

Greetings,
Ms Mettjes


(22.3.11 16:05)
Correction

Amy and Carol meet in the mall and go to McDonald's. There they see Brian. He is a G4 and so Carol shows him her dark green band and her notebook. This shows that Carol takes the color game very seriously.

Amy has left her blue band at home. Brian thinks that Amy has forgotten it and does not take the incident serious because Blues have more rights. But Amy says to Brian that she has decided not to wear it when she is not in school. She dislikes the color game and so Brian notices her attitude.

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